From: Susana Deustua (deustua@aas.org)
Date: Tue Aug 31 2004 - 08:53:48 PDT
Dear Serena,
Nice paper --
Here are my comments on the 21st July version, though as a late reader
i'll try to not repeat comments already made.
Grammatical and typos:
1. be careful with the use of commas, though this is usually a
stylistic issue, i noted commas in odd places.
2. check grammar and sentence constructions
3. write out abbreviations first time they're stated (e.g. CfA).
4. use "spectroscopically peculiar" rather than spectroscopic peculiar
Paper:
Section 1. in last paragraph list datasets you will be using
SEction 2.
Provide references and/or explain why the B-band templates are used to
fit I-band light curves, i.e. justification
give average separation in time of the two light peak to support why 40
days are adequate to sample both light peaks
in Table 1: t max and t sec doesn't hurt to remind the reader of how
these are measured (in the caption) even though it's stated in the text.
This you do in the figures later on.
section 3
in the last paragaph of this section, state the uncorrected B-band
dispersion of the Hubble diagram as well as the uncorr. I band sigma
section 4
in figure 8 -- what is the solid line? needs a key
Cheers,
Susana
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