From: Greg Aldering (aldering@panisse.lbl.gov)
Date: Tue Jul 01 2003 - 19:13:56 PDT
Hi Rob,
I re-read the submitted manuscript on my return from France, and
Michael kindly typed in my comments. I didn't have the Branch
comments in front of me, but remember some of them and tried to
address them where I could. Here's the result:
Greg's notes on submitted version of HST Paper
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[Prepared by the graduate student typing pool.]
[MWV: I didn't understand exactly what Greg meant by all of his notes
so Rob should just hope that Greg edits this and clarifies.]
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Overall comments:
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To address Branch's question about extinction at low-z I think the answer
is that we didn't do spectroscopic confirmation of bright candidates,
but Saul needs to confirm this.
Is 98as 91T-like? This was brought-up and the Stockholm meeting but I don't
know whether you want to mention this (probably not, since further study
is needed).
Has ground vs. space photometry comparison now been done?
Should we quote \Omega_M when we measure 'w' w/ CMB+2dF?
Do we still need to update closing paragraph?
Correlate E(B-V) with residual from the Huble diagram
All table footnotes need more space after last \hline
Also, all photometry tables need space before entries start
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Page-by-page Notes
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Shorthand guide: p2l1 means full paragraph 2, line 1
's' for sentence is also sometime used.
p0 refers to a continued paragraph from a previous page.
Lines can also be referenced counting from the bottom,
e.g. l-2 is the second line from the bottom
Additions are marked with [], removals with {}
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Page 3
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Abstract:
--These address Branch's comments on the abstract:
"These extinction measurements .." -> "The locus of restframe B-V colors for high-redshift supernovae is found to identical with that for low-redshift supernovae ($\Delta B$-$V = 0.013 \pm 0.015$)."
Last sentence rewrite to two sentences: "...E(B-V) distribution. Our new cosmological measurements are consistent with previous and other current supernova measurements and require dark energy with probability $P > 0.99$."
Introduction: -- l1 : "High-Z Supernova Search [Team]" l5 : Replace ',' with a ';' between "Perlmutter \etal 1999" and " for a review" Last sentence : "Even in the absence of ..." - Bad sentence
Page 4 ------ l5 : Add mention of 2dF Results large-scale structure results (since others use those)? l10 : "high-redshift supernovae" p2 : * "and dynamics" p3l5 : "brightness[es] dimmer" p3l8 : "[low-redshift] SNe Ia". Note on 'SNe Ia' - when do we define abbrev?
Page 5 ------ l4 : "sample[ ]---" l5 : "extinction[ ]---" [MWV student note. By typographical+LaTeX convention, these dashes are correctly done as "sample---in" and "extinction---independently". The result of this is that there is not space between the word and dash. This is correct even though looks wrong. However, the inconsistency between the preceeding word and the following word should be addressed. Otherwise, let the typesetter worry about it. Just be consistent throughout the paper.]
l6 : "flat Universe [and confirmed] {confirming} that" l9 : "measurements which {will} allow[s]" [MWV: It is ambiguous whether "which" refers to "next step" or "measurements". Rob and Greg apparently disagree about which and thus disagree about the plural or singular nature.]
Page 6 ------ p1l9 : "March/April 1998 search." How about the 2000 search?
Page 8 ------ p1l1 : "of a given {band}[filter]." ?
Page 10 ------- p2l7 : "to the {the}" p2l8 : "is the number of [observer-frame] days relative"
Page 11 ------- l4 : "measured from the {R-band(} restframe V-band{)} lightcurve" p3s-1: a single zeropoint for each supernova p4s-1: "through the {filter}[system] response." or "[effective filter]"
Page 13 ------- l10 : "although the data {is}[are] not"
Page 15 ------- l2 : Is Schlegel, Finkbeiner and Davis consistent with O'Donnell?
Page 16 ------- l10 : "extinction corrections{;} have" p1l1 : "cull" or "cull out"? [MVW: "cull out" is redundant. Just "cull"]
Page 17 ------- Figure 3 is mentioned in p0l3, but isn't introduced until p3.
Page 18 ------- p1l5 :"survey flux limit [and our preference to target the faintest SNe candidates for spectroscopic follow-up]." p4l3 : "...separate fits have been performed [separately]" p4l4 : "using {only} the high-redshift..." [MWV: I think Greg also means to remove the first "separate" in p4l3. so the full sample should read: "...{separate} first have been performed [separately] using {only} the high-redshift...".] p4l6 : "show the {fits to}[results for] the primary"
Page 20 ------- p1l-1: "{down} to $w < -10$." f1l1: "spectrum constriant on $\Omega_M h^2". Greg has circled the 2
Page 21 ------- p1l1 : "measurements show [mild] correlations between \OM and $w$ [and] in" p1 : Should we quote \OM too?
Page 23 ------- p1l2 : "Although this fit has a [much] worse" ?
Page 24 ------- p-1l3: "{we}[the current results] are less likely"
Page 26 ------- p1l3 : "our most[-]reddened"
Page 27 ------- p1 : Move the last sentence to right after the first sentence
Page 31 ------- p3l1 : "distortion measurement and [recent] CMB data"
Page 32 ------- p1l12: "at the CTIO 4-m." Other places "4m" is used.
------- Figures ------- Page 39 - Figure 1: -- Fix the offset points to the right in this and other lightcurves.
Add to caption: "Note that the HST coverage of the 1997 SNe shows a gap due to interruption in January 1998 by the NICMOS Camera 3 campaign."
Page 40 - Figure 2: -- Comment: Lightcurve points are still missing. Ground to space check done?
Page 42 - Figure 4: -- s2 :
"flux-limited sample and, for those searches, spectroscopic follow-up targeted only faint SN candidates, which at low-redshift would allow only early phase or extincted SNe Ia.)"
Page 43 - Figure 5: -- Upper-left plot, add legend.
------ Tables ------ Fix space at top and bottom of tables Also use fixed-format flux values. [MWV: presumbaly so that '+' and '-' don't take different amounts of space, for example.] [MWV: The table spacing issue seems one of specific typesetting, so how much control does Rob have on this in the final version?]
Page 57 - Table 6: -- Should we list and error bars on colors?
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